A Comment/Review on Quiver’s “Chronicles of Succubus High – Chapter II”

Two months ago, I commented on the first chapter of Quiver’s Chronicles of Succubus High. I really enjoyed it and if you haven’t had the chance to check that post yet, you can always do it now. The synopsis continues to be as follows:

A series of erotic short stories set at Emery High, where a budding young succubus is wreaking havoc among the staff and students alike.

After the window dressing spectacle of chapter I – pun intended to reflect the new title chapter – we now move into a world of locker rooms, revenge, and even learn a few more things about Bree, the Succubus, and her hunger and lust.

We begin with Clay – a young athlete from the football team, spying on her in the shower and masturbating senselessly after being “persuaded” to do so. The opening as she bathes and teases him, knowing he can’t help but watch and jerk off, demonstrates once again just how easily she affect those around her and follows the same pattern as the previous displays in the preceding chapter. Good stuff but certainly not the meat of it all, another pun intended.

Enter Hailey, Clay’s girlfriend who gets pissed at him for arriving late and even more when he mumbles the other girl’s name in the middle of a strange stupor. Jealousy ensues, of course, and if you’re thinking Hailey goes to confront Bree the moment she gets the chance, you’re absolutely right. Revelations ensue.

The first is that Bree is not really into girls despite being more than capable of seducing them and making them obey her every command as well. Shortly after that, we get to know that if someone cums inside her, it could potentially be lethal. No real explanation is given though it’s possible it’s something to do with her supernatural energy. There’s also a brief mention of her mother who’s most likely a Succubus too and will probably make an appearance sometime in the future. Certainly a string of interesting character developments, and I do find them intriguing.

Heat-wise, I’ll be honest in saying that the last section didn’t do much for me. Everything up until the moment Hailey is first affected by Bree’s charms is quite good and enjoyable but then there’s this gang bang scenario involving the football team which, for my personal tastes, was a bit overkill. While I still want to know more about this character and the world she moves herself in, I didn’t like “seeing” Hailey being used like that. Sure, they were all entranced in a way but still…

Anyway, if you don’t have that problem, then you’re sure to continue enjoying this one. I liked the first chapter better but there was still plenty of good moments and nice character development in the second installment. I shall continue to see where it all leads. I hope you do, too.

Thank you for reading.


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S. B.

Simple Being, Middle name Creative. Writer and artist with a penchant for themes of Female Domination, Hypnosis and Mind Control. My thoughts are my own except when they're not.

2 Responses

  1. Quiver says:

    Thanks so much for your review! I’m curious about what you said about not enjoying seeing Hailey being used. Was it all the scenes with Hailey under Bree’s influence, or just the gangbang part that you didn’t like? And was there anything more specific about that part that didn’t land for you?

  2. S. B. says:

    Just the gang bang, really. My femdom mind control stories usually involve women dominating men and sometimes, women dominating women, although the latter doesn’t come as often as the former. Having Bree take control of her with her supernatural charms was one thing but what followed, happened too fast, and was too extreme, in my humble opinion. Hailey didn’t deserve such a level of degradation and Bree felt just a tad too cruel at that point for making it happen the way it did. Please note that I’m no stranger to writing bitches and some of my takes can go quite dark but up until that point, all the action had been playful, naughty fun. That particular scene isn’t.

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