Saturday Story 2025 #9 (The Black Queen: Legend – Part 14)
This unique take on the world of The Black Queen continues today on my Patreon. This tale plays with the ideas of the original stories and turns them upside down in unexpected ways. It will be a long multi-parter with plenty of surprises along the way. Synopsis below:
When Jeremy is tasked with writing a piece about an erotic urban legend, he discovers some truths are better left buried.
Laura confronts the Black Queen in a digital world she created. Who will emerge victorious? Please enjoy.
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The world around Laura dissolved into a void of blackness, the only sounds the faint hum of the helmet’s circuitry and the distant echo of Jeremy’s protests. She tried to move, to struggle, but her body was unresponsive, rooted to the spot.
The darkness was absolute, a suffocating shroud that pressed against her skin, making it hard to breathe. Then, faint outlines began to materialize, shapes that grew sharper, more defined, until the world around her resolved into something that was both familiar and alien. She blinked as the reality of her surroundings dawned on her.
She stood in a grand, opulent hall, its walls lined with towering mirrors that stretched endlessly, reflecting images that seemed to ripple and distort as if they were alive. The floor beneath her feet was made of polished black marble and the air smelled of roses even though there was none in sight.
Chandeliers hung from the ceiling, their crystals refracting light into a kaleidoscope of colors that danced across the walls. But it was all wrong. The beauty of the hall was marred by an eerie stillness, a lack of warmth that made the space feel more like a tomb than a place of splendor.
“Welcome, Laura,” a voice purred, its melodious tones bouncing off the mirrored walls and filling the room with a haunting resonance. It was a voice she recognized, yet in this space, it seemed transformed – deeper, and more resonant. An undercurrent of amusement threaded through the words, creating an uncanny echo that sent an involuntary shiver racing down her spine.
She spun around, her heart thumping in her chest, and there she was. The Black Queen stood at the far end of the hall, her figure outlined against the soft glow of the chandeliers above. She wore a deep, inky black gown that sparkled as if encrusted with countless tiny stars. On her head, rested a tiara adorned with purple jewels. It emitted a spectral glow that sent a sharp pain through Laura’s eyes, forcing her to squint.
“Where am I?” Laura demanded, trying to keep her voice steady. She took a step forward, but her legs were heavy, as though the floor itself was resisting her movement. The mirrors reflected her distress and amplified it, each image weighing down on her troubled mind.
“You are where you need to be,” The Black Queen replied, her lips curling into an inviting yet terrifying smile. “This is your new home. A place where you will learn, grow, and become something greater than you ever imagined.
Laura shook her head. “This isn’t real. You’re playing some kind of mind trick on me.”(…)
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I’m disappointed that after waiting three weeks for the next installment of The Black Queen: Legend, it wasn’t quite what I hoped it would be. I guess I was hoping for something along the mind control devices originally employed by the BQ in the earlier stories, but even better because of the VR helmet. Instead, we got a more sophisticated mind control, which makes sense, using the new technology, but it wasn’t nearly as satisfying or erotic as what David went through originally. At least It wasn’t as wimpy of a surrender as Amber Watkins, since she actually wanted what the BQ was offering. From the line “But Laura knew it was a lie.,” the battle of wills should have raged. Instead, Laura’s legs started giving out, her feet ached, it was getting harder to breathe. What was causing all this? You almost got back on track at that point with ” Her presence engulfed everything, a chilling, oppressive force that crushed down on Laura, leaving her paralyzed.” I think what was missing here was a shift from the narrative to some first-person perspective from Laura, e.g., how did Laura perceive/feel her mind being “overwhelmed by the invasion taking place.” She felt her memories being pulled apart, examined, and discarded like trash. You say she felt them, but how did it feel. This is where you did such a great job in your earlier Black Queen stories, really living, as it were, in David’s mind. I’m sorry if I sound like I’m nitpicking, but these stories have always been among my favorites of all on the EMCSA. I have to say you finally struck a chord with me at the end with the lines that began with “The Black Queen’s presence filled her with a dark, suffocating shadow that seeped into every corner of her mind.” Finally, at the end, the line “She looked up, her eyes meeting the Black Queen’s, and in that moment, she knew she was lost. The brainwashing had taken her body and soul.” was the coup de grace for me. I will look forward, hopefully sooner than 3 weeks, to seeing what Laura is like when the helmet comes off. Even though the BQ told Laura that Jeremy was insignificant to her, I wouldn’t mind seeing Laura become the source/tool of the mind control that binds Jeremy to the BQ. That would be very cool. Thanks for listening to my rambling; I really am a fan.
I’m grateful for the comment, but I’ve always said this was a different take on the universe, so things will not play out the same way they did in previous stories. I could have answered sooner, but I didn’t want to give the game away regarding future installments. Laura is an important character to the tale, but Jeremy is the main one, so some of what you seek will be tied to his character development, not hers. Part XV is available now, so you can (partially) find out what I mean by that. Please enjoy.